I love this game so much, I think I have replayed it more than the amount of stars in the known universe lol
though I do want to ask if we can have a mordred who doesnt want to be a knight, my interest has been piqued ever since Robin asked us about way back when
The way I absolutely LOST it when we get to see Galahad again, and even more so in the scenes that followed! Absolutely love the world you're depicting piece by piece so far, and also enjoying the variety of ways we can play around with relationships, especially with regards to Morgana! In love with your writing, I hope to always be pleasantly surprised by the subtlety of it <3
<<if $water_magic == "sometimes" or $water_magic == "yes">><div class="choice">[[You won't be intimidated. Attempt it too, invoking the Goddess.|Chapt3GalConfrontShy3][$chapt3_shyness to 2, $Galahad to $Galahad+1]]</div><</if>>
The problem is, $water_magic is a numerical value of Mordred's skill. This check should be instead testing variable $water_study
edit: a bit more serious error -- there's a number of situations where the game adjusts variable $shy but the problem is, this variable is never defined in the first place. So all these adjustments do nothing, and any checks for value of this variable are bound to fail. Perhaps the game should be adjusting variable $confident in these cases?
Well, I created this account only to comment here and tell you: Thank you. For writing this beautiful game, for making these memorable characters, for all the touches of humor and for everything you have done and keep doing. Thanks for the update. And I hope you get well soon. Patiently waiting for more. This series is the best I have ever played. ( Thanks for creating Nimue.
well tbh i litterly cant define the inner shouting of joy going inside me when i saw there has been an update,although i fell well perhaps ufairly feel a bit disheartend seeing as how small the update seemed or it is just me,but it was still exciting...i hope there was more dioluges for modred converstion with merlin like i hoped that they would have properly interacted at the whole forced marriage thing,i would have abosultely relished saying a few words to him about being a father himself and enjoying the privilage of joy that comes with a family yet stealing that from modred with mere prophices to justify it,on top of it having nerve to show him his pethatic smile,i almost lothe him as much as morgana and i would sooners wipe that smile of his face with a washing broom then giving him the pleasentry and decency of a smile cant we just kill him? like murder was the thing on my mind when modred met him,i saw red lol,your writting is litterly soo enthrilling and captiviating,it just put you in a position where you apply what modred feels to yourself.espacially if you can relate to him some ways all too differntly...its certinaly written expecatinaly well,the writing initself and the chracters in a way all but feel seduactive grasping your intrest at the whole plot and desire to seek retribution for modred,very much soo by trapping merlin into his own viscious web of misrey he declare upon others fate he knows nothing about,just like a whim not even regretful...ehh this almost feel like he did somthing personal to offend me profoundly which i guess is fair since the whole personality of the chracter he plays in modred,arthuer and morgaana life,all but a leech obessive,ifuiated and power hungry perhaps unintentaionlly soo,thinking of him as the justified one in his actions while not realizing what angony he condemns others,almost feel pity and for nimune having a cruel selfish and callous monster for a father maybe even slight guilt for my modreds indiffernce to her but given her close relationship with merlin,it feels hard not to imagine modred either numb or brash towards her.i prefer the numb for my modred as long as i feel unaware wether nimue knows about modred true parentery or not and her fathers path in being the criminal who did modred a wrong that cant be done right by any words,but pain for pain not as vengence but retribution and justice,forgiveness for sake of ownself yet not forgetfulness seeking retrubtion but not letting it take over
Love the characters, the writing, the choices… everything. Very well done and I keep coming back to replay it. Thank you for the update and please continue taking care of yourself. I will always come back here to support this lovely story!
Replayed from the beginning. God this IF is such a masterpiece. As always, I'm almost more invested in just the relationship with Arthur then any ros. lol. But I did so much adore Gally and especially the dance at the end of the demo. And darn you, Gawain! You are the best/worst wingman ever. xD
Hello, LOve the game the storytelling is so good and each character feels so alive. Currently, I'm on the last chapter with Gareth's inner monologue and was wondering if he is meant to be aromantic since it seems he doesn't care too much about romance.
Really enjoyed the game thus far! Was way more engrossed in the story than I thought I would. Wanted to ask though, do you plan on adding the dragon companion as a romance option? Got really exited towards the end when you could show jealousy about her and Felix, but that got dropped quick. I'm sure my Mordred would appreciate it lol.
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Nope, the dragon friend is not a romantic option. The choice you're referring to wasn't meant as romantic jealousy, but the sort of jealousy that could crop up in a friendship. Granted, it's not handled very well because I do just randomly introduce it in the middle of chapter 5 and then drop it; it's when the idea came to me, and I was sort of testing it out before committing to the route.
I actually had a similar thought while playing the game. I believe that Arthur is Sir Kay's adoptive brother, which would technically make Mordred and Gawain cousins, but they are not biologically related nor were they raised as such.
I mean technically they are cousins, but they weren't raised together, nor do they really consider themselves as such unless you actively choose to later in game.
She was a toddler at most when Merlin made the prophecy and a young child when we last saw her 💀 There wasn't any indication that she knew of Mordred's prophecy (as I'm pretty sure Lot didn't know about the prophecy specifically)
i love this game sm, i keep coming back to it! i wanna kiss galahad pls pretty boy stop hating me already ;-; this is so well written and thought out, that's really cool! i really enjoy how different the story and the relationships play out :3 all my best wishes to the author!♡♡♡
only thing i think about every time i restart the game is that in the beginning merlin says "your son/daughter.. blah-blah will be bad" so if later mordred turns out to be trans and becomes daughter/son (or just kid) instead then technically the prophecy isn't about them anymore... ik the point is in choosing agab but it would be funny if trans mordred could use it against the prophecy lol ("the prophecy says your son will bring the end, Arthur! i'm not your son, i'm your daughter, you said you support me, do you not?? the prophecy isn't about me!!")
I didn't get much sleep last night because of this wonderful novel. I am really invested in Mordred happiness, in Morgana's pursuit of revenge/justice, in my dragon's love life! The only way I'm ready to interact with Arthurian legend is BBC's Merlin and now this game too 😁
I love that Mordred is flexible in sense of moral. That no one here are one-dimensional, everyone is after their own interests. This is refreshing. I will wait as long as needed. Thank you so much.
Not dead! Chapter 5 is just a huge chapter, so only half of it is available to play publicly while the patreon demo has some more content! However, the author has had a litany of bad luck re: their hand injury, so the updates so far have been small so the author doesn't overtax their hands.
As Over the Moon said, BoC is very much active! I've just had ups and downs in my recovery with nerve entrapment and haven't always been able to write much.
Sorry to hear about that, hope it isn't too painful! Make sure to take rebular breaks, and if need be take a long break, your health is more important than the story!
Hey hey! I've been enjoying the game so far, so there's nothing to criticize, but I had a quick question: My Mordred is female, but along the gameplay I've picked a few options that generally speak against the traditional female gender role, such as "I love dresses, but I don't want to be required to wear them".
Then, Morgana responded with something along the lines of "I'll support whatever decision you make", which back then I thought meant the dresses part. But fast forward to chapter four, I pick the Puberty Potion option, which leads me to following options:
"If you mean how I'd like people to refer to me, I don't quite know yet."
"I think I'd like people to start referring to me as he."
"I think I'd like people to start referring to me as they."
So I hope I didn't accidentally make my Mordred become transgender, because I identify as a cisgender female.
Hey, not a dev but from my experience playing this a lot in different ways I dont think it was the clothing choice. The puberty potion is meant to be a way to stop your character from undergoing female development and puberty.
Writer here, come to confirm what others have already helpfully said: it's the puberty potion option, that's specifically there to open up choices for trans/non-binary Mordred. (clothes have nothing to do with it, Mordred can choose to wear whatever, cis or trans).
Absolutely loved this! Went way past my expectations. Wonderful and engaging storytelling. I am so glad that I gave this a try. Truly hope that the story will continue. 20/10 good stuff good stuff.
Oblivious options create/increase romantic attachment between MC and the target person, but one where MC doesn't realize the nature of their fondness, and isn't openly (or at least intentionally) flirting.
Nope, TBOC is still kicking on! she's finishing up chapter 5, but the authors hand has been Not Doing Great, so this chapters progress will be rather slow as she recovers.
Amazing writing, but small twine coding detail: the <<silently>> command could be used to clean up the massive blank spaces left at the bottom of some passages. That way code and hidden choices don't add extra line breaks to the passage and make them super long.
Is it weird that my favorite part is your really well thought out lesson plan? Thank you for being so conscientious about it, it felt so very reasonable and served as a great intro to the lore as we learn alongside our little protagonist!
Just finished reading up to the end of the current demo and overall I really enjoyed it! 😀
To start with, I'll talk about the parts I had some problems with. There were some points during the last two chapters (3 & 4) while Mordred was going about his daily life/lessons when nothing much was happening and it just felt like a bit of an info (lore) dump. I other words, it sort of dragged and I began to lose interest and skimmed. I wanted to be honest about my personal experience here even if it might not be the glowing praise some would give. Skimming is a subconscious reaction for me when my brain stops feeling engaged and searches for the next point of interest in a story. I'm not saying it was that way for other readers, but it was so far me.
I also lost some interest in the dragons, which somehow feel a little too normalised now, even mundane, and my 'fierce' dragon feels quite tame. I feel it's become a bit lax in upholding that sense of wonder that, as bonded as we may be with our dragon, we should still feel from time to time over these powerful creatures. I also feel that, due to being a Pendragon/Dragonblood, our insight and connection with dragons in general, even if we're cautious in not showing it, should still feel more profound then it does. Like we just perceive them on a level that others (besides Arthur) cannot, even if we're not actively engaging them. I still don't really get that vibe from it.
But other than those bits, I found your writing style is very mature and polished. I really love the way you portray Morgana - she genuinely feels as powerful and formidable as she should feel, and I think she is the character you write best. I'm always interested to see what she'll do next and what little (or not-so-little) schemes she's got cooking. Really nice. Our Mordred is also a well written MC - suitably complex. Lastly, I'm enjoying the building yet conflicted relationship between Mordred and Arthur - I'm really intrigued to see the future difficulties the relationship faces as the two grow closer and Arthur becomes even more conflicted between his trust in Merlin's prophecy and his own (potential) desire to recognise Mordred as his successor, and of course the potential public fallout of such a revelation. But I suppose that's all quite far in the future! Most importantly, I felt disappointed when I reached the end of the demo and there was no more for now, which is always a good sign. 😊
I also hope we see more of Galahad soon - my male Mordred's chosen LI. So far the parts with him have been my favourite parts of this story (what can I say? I'm a sucker for the enemies-to-lovers trope). I enjoyed the nature of Mordred's relationship with him during our first meeting, and how by the end Galahad is potentially torn between the desire to believe and follow his father and the realisation that his father is not as perfect or right as he originally imagined, and Mordred may not be this world-ender that he's made to believe. I also like the antagonism between them too, and am interested to see how they'll interact when they're reunited after 5 years - what's changed, and how the attraction blossoms (both advertently and inadvertently) out of what starts out as antagonism. The complexity and changing nature of it is always a fun experience, in my opinion! ❤
I'm also wondering - will it be possible to romance Galahad even if our Mordred doesn't exactly try to befriend him? By that I mean, Mordred might still antagonise Galahad as he does him, but Galahad is observant enough to see how Mordred acts toward people he cares about, and that Mordred may not be quite as "horrible" as all that, not to mention Mordred's teasing flirts (potentially) getting him a bit flustered despite himself. Anyway, it would be interesting to know!
As a #galahad historian whose stalked his tag on the blog relentlessly, you can romance galahad without befriending him! As long as you show some romantic interest in him (whether oblivious or knowingly) and try to change his mind on you being Evil McEvilsteen from the Land of All Evil, a romance can happen!
Thank you for the feedback. You're not the first one to raise such concerns regarding pacing/lore dumping, and I've thought about it all and decided I will be making edits to the chapters in question (as well as other changes I've planned, like introducing Guin earlier). Now, I don't know exactly when I'll get round to doing that - if I'll manage by the next public update - but it's something I've noted and made plans for.
Regarding the dragons, I'm not sure I fully understand what you mean? I'll admit I'm quite unsatisfied with the current dragon friend personalities, and I have the intention to change things - instead of choosing one big trait, which I feel have turned the way I write the dragon friend rather one-dimensional, I'll be adopting a different approach, using "archetypes" in order to go more in depth with the characterization.
And yes, Mordred can romance Galahad while antagonizing him!
Well, according to (very old, so don't shoot me if I'm wrong) tumblr asks, you can flirt with ro's as long as you don't get locked into a 'route' beforehand- so, let's say I have a childhood crush on Nimue, but then flirt with Galahad, BUT I also sometimes flirt with Nimue as well. In game, it would probably translate to the two characters experiencing confusion regarding who I'm interested in, and potentially start a few arguments. (At least, from what I understood from, I'll say this again, very old tumblr asks.)
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I love this game so much, I think I have replayed it more than the amount of stars in the known universe lol
though I do want to ask if we can have a mordred who doesnt want to be a knight, my interest has been piqued ever since Robin asked us about way back when
also I'd die for my Dragon. No questions asked
There are choices where you can be less enthusiastic about being a knight and merely doing it because it's expected of you.
The way I absolutely LOST it when we get to see Galahad again, and even more so in the scenes that followed! Absolutely love the world you're depicting piece by piece so far, and also enjoying the variety of ways we can play around with relationships, especially with regards to Morgana! In love with your writing, I hope to always be pleasantly surprised by the subtlety of it <3
There's a minor bug in the demo:
The problem is, $water_magic is a numerical value of Mordred's skill. This check should be instead testing variable $water_study
edit: a bit more serious error -- there's a number of situations where the game adjusts variable $shy but the problem is, this variable is never defined in the first place. So all these adjustments do nothing, and any checks for value of this variable are bound to fail. Perhaps the game should be adjusting variable $confident in these cases?
Well, I created this account only to comment here and tell you: Thank you. For writing this beautiful game, for making these memorable characters, for all the touches of humor and for everything you have done and keep doing. Thanks for the update. And I hope you get well soon. Patiently waiting for more. This series is the best I have ever played. ( Thanks for creating Nimue.
My Mordred is definitely torn between Elaine and Galahad. 🤣
IK! I tried to charm the little brat but he won't fall and I can figure out how to replace our brother in the dang wedding.
well tbh i litterly cant define the inner shouting of joy going inside me when i saw there has been an update,although i fell well perhaps ufairly feel a bit disheartend seeing as how small the update seemed or it is just me,but it was still exciting...i hope there was more dioluges for modred converstion with merlin like i hoped that they would have properly interacted at the whole forced marriage thing,i would have abosultely relished saying a few words to him about being a father himself and enjoying the privilage of joy that comes with a family yet stealing that from modred with mere prophices to justify it,on top of it having nerve to show him his pethatic smile,i almost lothe him as much as morgana and i would sooners wipe that smile of his face with a washing broom then giving him the pleasentry and decency of a smile cant we just kill him? like murder was the thing on my mind when modred met him,i saw red lol,your writting is litterly soo enthrilling and captiviating,it just put you in a position where you apply what modred feels to yourself.espacially if you can relate to him some ways all too differntly...its certinaly written expecatinaly well,the writing initself and the chracters in a way all but feel seduactive grasping your intrest at the whole plot and desire to seek retribution for modred,very much soo by trapping merlin into his own viscious web of misrey he declare upon others fate he knows nothing about,just like a whim not even regretful...ehh this almost feel like he did somthing personal to offend me profoundly which i guess is fair since the whole personality of the chracter he plays in modred,arthuer and morgaana life,all but a leech obessive,ifuiated and power hungry perhaps unintentaionlly soo,thinking of him as the justified one in his actions while not realizing what angony he condemns others,almost feel pity and for nimune having a cruel selfish and callous monster for a father maybe even slight guilt for my modreds indiffernce to her but given her close relationship with merlin,it feels hard not to imagine modred either numb or brash towards her.i prefer the numb for my modred as long as i feel unaware wether nimue knows about modred true parentery or not and her fathers path in being the criminal who did modred a wrong that cant be done right by any words,but pain for pain not as vengence but retribution and justice,forgiveness for sake of ownself yet not forgetfulness seeking retrubtion but not letting it take over
Love the characters, the writing, the choices… everything. Very well done and I keep coming back to replay it. Thank you for the update and please continue taking care of yourself. I will always come back here to support this lovely story!
which part of the stats page tells how easily Modred cries?
Hey! Once the full game is finished, will it cost money and if so, how much?
Just realized I asked this question before, lol, sorry about that
Replayed from the beginning. God this IF is such a masterpiece. As always, I'm almost more invested in just the relationship with Arthur then any ros. lol. But I did so much adore Gally and especially the dance at the end of the demo. And darn you, Gawain! You are the best/worst wingman ever. xD
This choice leads to a blank screen
"She's a lovely person," you say, if only to accrue favor with the siblings. "I could see us becoming friends."
Wait is gawain wearing a dress or not im so confused😭
I think its one of those coats with a really long coat-tail. Which...actually fits his unique flare. xD
new update was fire. loved antagonizing galahad 10/10
NEW UPDATE!!!!! I replayed the whole thing from the start, oh my god its so good!!
ME AND GALLY DANCED YES BITCHES ITS THE BEST DAY EVERRRRRR I LOVE THE UPDATE
WAIT WHAT THE UPDATE IS ALREADY THERE
sooooo hypothetically what would happen if i decide to pick the heart options for all of them?
The oblivious romance options give me great merriment.
I'm absolutely in love with this!!! One playthrough and I'm utterly invested in the story. You're genuinely an amazing writer. Can't wait for more!!!
I've gotta take Gareth's place in the wedding. I need it! GAHHHH
Hello, LOve the game the storytelling is so good and each character feels so alive. Currently, I'm on the last chapter with Gareth's inner monologue and was wondering if he is meant to be aromantic since it seems he doesn't care too much about romance.
OMG, I've continued reading and have confirmed he's a AA battery :3, thank you for this lovable character
Really enjoyed the game thus far! Was way more engrossed in the story than I thought I would. Wanted to ask though, do you plan on adding the dragon companion as a romance option? Got really exited towards the end when you could show jealousy about her and Felix, but that got dropped quick. I'm sure my Mordred would appreciate it lol.
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Nope, the dragon friend is not a romantic option. The choice you're referring to wasn't meant as romantic jealousy, but the sort of jealousy that could crop up in a friendship. Granted, it's not handled very well because I do just randomly introduce it in the middle of chapter 5 and then drop it; it's when the idea came to me, and I was sort of testing it out before committing to the route.
HMMMMMM WHY DOE THIS REMINDS OF.... four knights of the apocalypse
Bruh i made my MC, Gay.
I'm kinda new in the IFs games but i wanted to ask is Four knights of the apocalypse, IF?
Is this still in progress?
Yep! (I've just been dealing with some health issues and haven't always been able to write so much)
get well soon!!!!!
Feel better soon!
I actually had a similar thought while playing the game. I believe that Arthur is Sir Kay's adoptive brother, which would technically make Mordred and Gawain cousins, but they are not biologically related nor were they raised as such.
I mean technically they are cousins, but they weren't raised together, nor do they really consider themselves as such unless you actively choose to later in game.
I feel some animosity towards Merlin here. Cant be sure though.
I don't blame you at all. My mc would stab merlin a thousand times if they could lol
YESS PLEASE LET US STAB MELIN AUTHOR 🥺🥺🥺
what did his daughter do, exactly?
She was a toddler at most when Merlin made the prophecy and a young child when we last saw her 💀 There wasn't any indication that she knew of Mordred's prophecy (as I'm pretty sure Lot didn't know about the prophecy specifically)
Even if this is true, I'm not sure this is a torture worthy offense? Like bold and controversial opinion here, but torture bad.
i love this game sm, i keep coming back to it! i wanna kiss galahad pls pretty boy stop hating me already ;-; this is so well written and thought out, that's really cool! i really enjoy how different the story and the relationships play out :3 all my best wishes to the author!♡♡♡
only thing i think about every time i restart the game is that in the beginning merlin says "your son/daughter.. blah-blah will be bad" so if later mordred turns out to be trans and becomes daughter/son (or just kid) instead then technically the prophecy isn't about them anymore... ik the point is in choosing agab but it would be funny if trans mordred could use it against the prophecy lol ("the prophecy says your son will bring the end, Arthur! i'm not your son, i'm your daughter, you said you support me, do you not?? the prophecy isn't about me!!")
I didn't get much sleep last night because of this wonderful novel. I am really invested in Mordred happiness, in Morgana's pursuit of revenge/justice, in my dragon's love life! The only way I'm ready to interact with Arthurian legend is BBC's Merlin and now this game too 😁
I love that Mordred is flexible in sense of moral. That no one here are one-dimensional, everyone is after their own interests. This is refreshing. I will wait as long as needed. Thank you so much.
Not dead! Chapter 5 is just a huge chapter, so only half of it is available to play publicly while the patreon demo has some more content! However, the author has had a litany of bad luck re: their hand injury, so the updates so far have been small so the author doesn't overtax their hands.
As Over the Moon said, BoC is very much active! I've just had ups and downs in my recovery with nerve entrapment and haven't always been able to write much.
Sorry to hear about that, hope it isn't too painful! Make sure to take rebular breaks, and if need be take a long break, your health is more important than the story!
Get well soon and know that you can't rush perfection
Hey hey!
I've been enjoying the game so far, so there's nothing to criticize, but I had a quick question: My Mordred is female, but along the gameplay I've picked a few options that generally speak against the traditional female gender role, such as "I love dresses, but I don't want to be required to wear them".
Then, Morgana responded with something along the lines of "I'll support whatever decision you make", which back then I thought meant the dresses part. But fast forward to chapter four, I pick the Puberty Potion option, which leads me to following options:
"If you mean how I'd like people to refer to me, I don't quite know yet."
"I think I'd like people to start referring to me as he."
"I think I'd like people to start referring to me as they."
So I hope I didn't accidentally make my Mordred become transgender, because I identify as a cisgender female.
Hey, not a dev but from my experience playing this a lot in different ways I dont think it was the clothing choice. The puberty potion is meant to be a way to stop your character from undergoing female development and puberty.
Yeah, the puberty potion is basically the trigger for being able to have your Mordred be non-binary/trans. The clothing has nothing to do with that.
Writer here, come to confirm what others have already helpfully said: it's the puberty potion option, that's specifically there to open up choices for trans/non-binary Mordred. (clothes have nothing to do with it, Mordred can choose to wear whatever, cis or trans).
Oh, alright! I thought it was meant to speed up the puberty to develop sooner, lol. Thanks for clarifying, everyone :))
Absolutely loved this! Went way past my expectations. Wonderful and engaging storytelling. I am so glad that I gave this a try. Truly hope that the story will continue. 20/10 good stuff good stuff.
So I'm a bit confused on this but what exactly does it mean by oblivious romance?????
Oblivious options create/increase romantic attachment between MC and the target person, but one where MC doesn't realize the nature of their fondness, and isn't openly (or at least intentionally) flirting.
Oh that makes sense thank you for answering my question. :)
PLEASE DON'T LET THIS BE DEAD!!!!! IT'S SO GOOD!!!
It isnt😁 shes also got another WIP in progress though, so it might take a while
Nope, TBOC is still kicking on! she's finishing up chapter 5, but the authors hand has been Not Doing Great, so this chapters progress will be rather slow as she recovers.
Amazing writing, but small twine coding detail: the <<silently>> command could be used to clean up the massive blank spaces left at the bottom of some passages. That way code and hidden choices don't add extra line breaks to the passage and make them super long.
thank you for the tip! I'll edit all those instances at some point, i know they don't look great with the gaps 😅
by far the best interactive fiction I've read, and I've read quite a few!!! I loved all the characters and AHHH the worldbuilding! Im so far hooked!!!
Is it weird that my favorite part is your really well thought out lesson plan? Thank you for being so conscientious about it, it felt so very reasonable and served as a great intro to the lore as we learn alongside our little protagonist!
I'm so glad you enjoyed those :)
Discord server link!
Just finished reading up to the end of the current demo and overall I really enjoyed it! 😀
To start with, I'll talk about the parts I had some problems with. There were some points during the last two chapters (3 & 4) while Mordred was going about his daily life/lessons when nothing much was happening and it just felt like a bit of an info (lore) dump. I other words, it sort of dragged and I began to lose interest and skimmed. I wanted to be honest about my personal experience here even if it might not be the glowing praise some would give. Skimming is a subconscious reaction for me when my brain stops feeling engaged and searches for the next point of interest in a story. I'm not saying it was that way for other readers, but it was so far me.
I also lost some interest in the dragons, which somehow feel a little too normalised now, even mundane, and my 'fierce' dragon feels quite tame. I feel it's become a bit lax in upholding that sense of wonder that, as bonded as we may be with our dragon, we should still feel from time to time over these powerful creatures. I also feel that, due to being a Pendragon/Dragonblood, our insight and connection with dragons in general, even if we're cautious in not showing it, should still feel more profound then it does. Like we just perceive them on a level that others (besides Arthur) cannot, even if we're not actively engaging them. I still don't really get that vibe from it.
But other than those bits, I found your writing style is very mature and polished. I really love the way you portray Morgana - she genuinely feels as powerful and formidable as she should feel, and I think she is the character you write best. I'm always interested to see what she'll do next and what little (or not-so-little) schemes she's got cooking. Really nice. Our Mordred is also a well written MC - suitably complex. Lastly, I'm enjoying the building yet conflicted relationship between Mordred and Arthur - I'm really intrigued to see the future difficulties the relationship faces as the two grow closer and Arthur becomes even more conflicted between his trust in Merlin's prophecy and his own (potential) desire to recognise Mordred as his successor, and of course the potential public fallout of such a revelation. But I suppose that's all quite far in the future!
Most importantly, I felt disappointed when I reached the end of the demo and there was no more for now, which is always a good sign. 😊
I also hope we see more of Galahad soon - my male Mordred's chosen LI. So far the parts with him have been my favourite parts of this story (what can I say? I'm a sucker for the enemies-to-lovers trope). I enjoyed the nature of Mordred's relationship with him during our first meeting, and how by the end Galahad is potentially torn between the desire to believe and follow his father and the realisation that his father is not as perfect or right as he originally imagined, and Mordred may not be this world-ender that he's made to believe. I also like the antagonism between them too, and am interested to see how they'll interact when they're reunited after 5 years - what's changed, and how the attraction blossoms (both advertently and inadvertently) out of what starts out as antagonism. The complexity and changing nature of it is always a fun experience, in my opinion! ❤
I'm also wondering - will it be possible to romance Galahad even if our Mordred doesn't exactly try to befriend him? By that I mean, Mordred might still antagonise Galahad as he does him, but Galahad is observant enough to see how Mordred acts toward people he cares about, and that Mordred may not be quite as "horrible" as all that, not to mention Mordred's teasing flirts (potentially) getting him a bit flustered despite himself. Anyway, it would be interesting to know!
As a #galahad historian whose stalked his tag on the blog relentlessly, you can romance galahad without befriending him! As long as you show some romantic interest in him (whether oblivious or knowingly) and try to change his mind on you being Evil McEvilsteen from the Land of All Evil, a romance can happen!
Nice, thanks!
Thank you for the feedback. You're not the first one to raise such concerns regarding pacing/lore dumping, and I've thought about it all and decided I will be making edits to the chapters in question (as well as other changes I've planned, like introducing Guin earlier). Now, I don't know exactly when I'll get round to doing that - if I'll manage by the next public update - but it's something I've noted and made plans for.
Regarding the dragons, I'm not sure I fully understand what you mean? I'll admit I'm quite unsatisfied with the current dragon friend personalities, and I have the intention to change things - instead of choosing one big trait, which I feel have turned the way I write the dragon friend rather one-dimensional, I'll be adopting a different approach, using "archetypes" in order to go more in depth with the characterization.
And yes, Mordred can romance Galahad while antagonizing him!
Again, thank you so much for the feedback! ❤
If I understood correctly there will be no poly routes, right?
Unless all character can be romanced at once, and we woukd have to deal with consequences such as they would be.
Well, according to (very old, so don't shoot me if I'm wrong) tumblr asks, you can flirt with ro's as long as you don't get locked into a 'route' beforehand- so, let's say I have a childhood crush on Nimue, but then flirt with Galahad, BUT I also sometimes flirt with Nimue as well. In game, it would probably translate to the two characters experiencing confusion regarding who I'm interested in, and potentially start a few arguments. (At least, from what I understood from, I'll say this again, very old tumblr asks.)
Ah, understandable.
Thank you for the information.